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need help with bio
don thibodeaux -
Tuesday, October 14, 2008 - 9:52pm
Any suggestions? ![]() The Straights
Frank Castiglione -
Wednesday, October 15, 2008 - 10:13am
Hi Don, ![]() Wow...you are really
Kimberli Matin -
Monday, October 20, 2008 - 9:55am
Wow...you are really attempting to say a lot. It's confusing to me. You talk about your work exploring the human body's place within two endless wars and the struggle we face in today's fracturing society...(that's a lot right there! Whew!).......then the body's movement as it reacts and recreates itself from physical, mental and/or spiritual issues....(I like that....and when I look at your work it helps bring this into focus).....then how the work exaggerates and incorporates the combination of the subjects physical movement and the pieces place within limits "allowed".....wowie. I really like your work and I also like what I feel about what you are attempting to explain. I would like to see it more clear. I am sorry I am not an editor......a good editor could help you whip it into shape. O.K.......for a small suggestion.......I would take out the word 'recent' from the TOP line. That way.....when you discuss 'recent' work in the 6th line down, it would help to separate those two concepts. There's a lot of other combining of ideas and deleting that I would suggest, however.......I'm hoping someone with sharp editing skills will step forward to assist...... ![]() Hi Don, I'm anxious to see
eligius1427 -
Monday, October 20, 2008 - 12:50pm
Hi Don, I'm anxious to see the replies to this because i have been trying to write an artist bio for about a year and half now. I'll write it one way and like it for a few months, then another, etc. etc. Sometimes i think there is not enough info other times too much. I personally find it a bit intimidating to try to explain yourself/art in 5-7 sentences. As for your bio it sounds very deep and i had to read it slowly to understand it correctly. That however is probably due to my reading skills not your writing. I think i would keep my show locations to either all states or all cities, and would rephrase "His work has appeared in..." to "His work has been shown in..." or "His work has been displayed...". "Appeared in" sounds like a magazine name should follow or something. Other than that I think you've explained your goals, influences, and style fairly well. As Kimberli said, hopefully someone with some editing skills will put their two cents in so we can all learn a few things. Jake Jake Balcom |
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Hi Don, I think your Art
Hi Don,
I think your Art work is Awesome!
As far as your Bio. I think it speaks for itself.
I liked it. I felt it was informative and expressed your since of style.
I wish I had been able to see your work when I lived in MI.
If you ever tour on the west side again, maybe the Southwest.
Let me know?
Again your creativity speaks for itself!
WELL DONE..
Chuck